Burried face deep in snow
my family pulls me forward
looks so cruel but is a gift
trecking through the path
snow is my path
destination unknown
no buildings no cars
just trees and my dog sled
we keep going
this is our cause this is our purpose
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Reid Great Poem,
I have a few things to say that i think could be a big help to your poems
1: i think you could make it a little longer, put some more meat into it
2: you might want to put a few of those lines together such as " Trecking through my snowy path"
ESSERY
adding on to what sam said...
I'd say add one more line of description for each lin you already have.
for example:
Buried face, deep in snow
The cold is my friend
I get back up
and continue the entourage
HEYY,
nice blog, nice poem,nice life.
you really are a poet, there very meaningful. I am taking notes:)
HAHA, i especially love the letter to RSGC (no jokes) ahah,
Love you,
Inde
u so should be.... again i made this for english not for my free time
but yes im such a natutal poet
complete jks
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